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333 Reads 15 Votes 2 Part Story
Gravy N. Fries By frenchfry_addict19 Updated Jun 07, 2012

Kaelie Dawson is a simple 16 year old who begins her sophomore year at Stony Brooke with new surprises. She meets a very strange guy named Ian Thorne who happens to be some kind of freaky stalker...Or is he? He says that Kaelie is born a witch and withholds an extraordinary power. Follow kaelie as her life is turned upside down as she meets Ian. Will she be able to set things right again, despite the fact that she is now a teenage witch in training?

  • love
  • magic
  • teenager
  • witch
Llamadillo5 Llamadillo5 Jun 21, 2012
I have a friend named Teri...but she's a girl. Its kind of weird thinking of a her as a boy because her name is spelled exactly like that. Its funny because her hair is short and kind of bushy too. and brown. (:
frenchfry_addict19 frenchfry_addict19 Jun 08, 2012
@beautifulatsunrise @ihaveapetdinosaur thaanks guys... I dunno why  i started writing the first part about nail polish, but hey, whatever comes to my head gets written down. XD
beautifulatsunrise beautifulatsunrise Jun 08, 2012
I like your writing :) The first paragraph was just a bit too weird/sudden. Maybe it's just me, I was thinking: Huh? Why are you telling me about turqoise nails but other than that, it's good!
ihaveapetdinosaur ihaveapetdinosaur Jun 08, 2012
your writing is pretty impressive for a 13 year old :D
                              i liked this chapter its a great start. and i actually really liked the first opening paragraph about the nail polish (: (someone below said that it was kinda slow..?)
                              
                              only a few errors- not bad
frenchfry_addict19 frenchfry_addict19 Jun 08, 2012
@Eclipse119 and Yep, sara paxton is from aquamarine. I love that movie too. :D
frenchfry_addict19 frenchfry_addict19 Jun 08, 2012
@Eclipse119 Yeah.. I know chapter one is pretty slow... but hey, chapter 2 isn't... (or atleast thats what I think.) Lol... and thanks for reading! :D I appreciate it...a lot. :D