Fight of the Kingdoms

Fight of the Kingdoms

7.3K Reads 307 Votes 13 Part Story
DragonRider4 By DragonRider4 Completed

Sixteen year old Derek, heir to the throne, has Valerio, a dragon, as his best friend. Now, he has to find a wife, while he fights a war with his father, cousin, and uncle. For four months, it has gone on, victory after victory, until Derek meets someone who changes his life. Inspired by the Assassin's Creed video game series and the Inheritance Cycle.

  • assassin
  • baby
  • battle
  • blade
  • castle
  • church
  • dragon
  • dragons
  • engagment
  • evil
  • fight
  • funeral
  • kingdom
  • marriage
  • meeting
  • murder
  • powers
  • prince
  • revenge
  • romance
  • royal
  • sacrifice
  • seal
  • secret
  • sorrow
  • temple
  • war
  • weapons
  • wedding
  • wife
AuraWaterfall AuraWaterfall Jul 15, 2014
I thought it was obvious. Or was it not and me just putting the facts together to early.
MaitreyaTheNovel MaitreyaTheNovel Jan 04, 2014
Chapter 2 Page 3:
                              
                              Yah, Congrats on reaching the 1,000 Reads Mark!! Well Done!
                              
                              ". . . but in a way you rescued me."
                              
                              How Romantic!! At least the potential now, for romance!
MaitreyaTheNovel MaitreyaTheNovel Nov 15, 2013
In that "James is attacking . . . " paragraph, the word to edit is "battle" . . . take care of is and let me know!
MaitreyaTheNovel MaitreyaTheNovel Nov 15, 2013
Looks good . . . next . . . look at the next paragraph, "James is attacking. There are two key words in that paragraph the same and too close to each other (only 1 line apart). 
                              
                              What is that word, fix it, and let me know . . .
MaitreyaTheNovel MaitreyaTheNovel Nov 15, 2013
Good, you took care of "woke" and "wake" . . .
                              
                              Next, move, I sat up in my bed and asked, to the end of your question, "What's going on father?"
                              
                              Then, eliminate one of the two "asked" words . . . they are too close to each other.