We belong together

We belong together

835 Reads 17 Votes 3 Part Story
Jennifer Dixon By Jenndixon Updated Mar 17, 2011

When Jenn Kisses Damien she immediately falls for him But does he like her like she likes him. Why would he Just kiss her like that and then walk away!?!?!

    Jenndixon Jenndixon Mar 11, 2011
    Thank you but i decided to change it up a little what do you think? im so excited for you guys to read it 
    thelionftw thelionftw Mar 11, 2011
    I agree with the other two comments. There's a lot of run-on sentences. Also, don't use text acronyms like OMG and FML, because it's then like you're texting, and not writing a story. 
                                  But it's a good plot. Just make sure to edit.
    cammi363 cammi363 Mar 08, 2011
    i agree... but i definetly think you have somthing good starting here... keep writing and i will keep reading! 
                                  
                                  <3 Cammi
    Gotta_Luv_It Gotta_Luv_It Mar 08, 2011
    ummmm, interesting. I like your plot, but u hav run-on sentences. mayb u cud uhhh, make a rollercoaster relationship go on. just a guess.