Only a Demigod Knows

Only a Demigod Knows

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Ellie By Retr0spect Updated Jun 15, 2012

surprisingly Im a demigod and sadly Im going to have to go to Camp half-blood with this jerk Blake. Maybe it wont be to bad. Nevermind Everyone her is so amazing I feel like i just dont belong have I mentioned my godly parents hasnt claimed me yet. The only thing left to go wrong is me ending up with a quest. :\...... cover made by Cudge407

TheTeenAuthor TheTeenAuthor May 15, 2011
This has potential, but the grammar needs work. I do like where the plot is going, though. 
Retr0spect Retr0spect Apr 01, 2011
@trishthewriter Thank you once again for taking the time to read it and tell me what to improve. and yea I notice that about my dialogue >.< im trying to fix it
Retr0spect Retr0spect Apr 01, 2011
@trishthewriter thank you for actual adressing some of those things instead of just saying "it sucks" like most people would and I'll sure keep those thinks in mind next time i write a chapter
trishthewriter trishthewriter Mar 31, 2011
There was a mash up of dialogue which made your story hard to follow at times. I'm also seeing a tendency to jump between past and present tense. You want to pick one and stick with it so readers aren't confused. 
trishthewriter trishthewriter Mar 31, 2011
I think there's potential, but some things need to be addressed. Don't add extra puncuation to emphasize things. You have to find another way to do that. Also, numbers should be spelled out. You also don't want to use all caps for emphasis. Editors don't want to see that. 
MadeForTheSaddle MadeForTheSaddle Mar 15, 2011
Hey, u asked me to read this story. I think its apollo. Im probly wrong. I like it!  U should keep going.