Twisted

Twisted

238 Reads 3 Votes 2 Part Story
UniqueNotUseful By UniqueNotUseful Updated Mar 24, 2011

Corey Theelis' life sucks. His dad managed to give him the crappiest highschool reputation ever, but it's finally summer. But being friends with Allen doesn't mean a normal summer. And then things start happening; Corey meets a couple new people, starts putting two and two together. But what does it mean?

JragonJanet JragonJanet Feb 28, 2011
No idea, but I like the title of the story now, it creates an element of mystery xD
UniqueNotUseful UniqueNotUseful Feb 25, 2011
@JragonJanet and @frakkevin Thank you both so much, and do you guys happen to have any ideas for a title based on this? Cheers, Danielle
JragonJanet JragonJanet Feb 24, 2011
Intriguing beginning, it does create an element of mystery around Allen, but I think you need to introduce the characters a bit more or give us the reason why he was grafitting? IYou should write some more to get the reader hooked :P I like it so far tho :)
KAFrak KAFrak Feb 24, 2011
I'm not into the plot....but overall I enjoyed reading the opening and the grammar was good. I think grammar is really important...I liked this.
                              
                              
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