Silver Knight- A New Dawn (GirlxGirl)

Silver Knight- A New Dawn (GirlxGirl)

286K Reads 10.4K Votes 16 Part Story
Jaqueline Feller By Silver_Blade16 Completed

Dawn Knight is your regular 21 year old with an attitude to kill. She feels nobody has ever wanted her around except for her best friend Amber. She hates people, and could care less what happens to those around her. But that all changes when she finds a black wolf hiding behind a dumpster, only to discover more that its actually a female werewolf!. Her wounds are deep, but her heart is strong. Dawn feels the need to protect this girl, but why? She's never really cared for anybody, why is this girl any different? When dawn takes the girl home, she finds a world that's suppose the only exist in your regular story book. She says her name is Salina Casterwill, but who is this woman? And why is she making Dawn feel so...wanted?

A/N: This is book one of the Silver Knight series.

ThatCrazyBlob_1 ThatCrazyBlob_1 Nov 14, 2017
The word "say" feels a little awkward here, especially after the question mark and the exclamation point. Maybe change it to "yelled" or "questioned sarcastically." Not necessarily either of those, but maybe something that fits the punctuation better.
ThatCrazyBlob_1 ThatCrazyBlob_1 Nov 14, 2017
There are a few sentence structure errors in this paragraph, but its nothing that a simple. read-through won't fix.
QueeNDanica143 QueeNDanica143 Nov 05, 2017
>,<)" I had a hard time reading I feel slow damn. this is what happens when I have no ont to text me 😂
ThatCrazyBlob_1 ThatCrazyBlob_1 Nov 14, 2017
The first sentence contains both the words "taking" and "take" which makes it sound a bit dull and repetitive. Try changing the first word to something like "grabbing" for more variety.
zarrianyrie zarrianyrie Jun 26
Yoo I had that phone when I was ten 💀 thought I was this shii 😂
notcoolfools notcoolfools Aug 23, 2017
My sister would just let me be late and say she did me a favor