Halfway Heaven (a story by a soul) [ON HOLD]

6 Part Story 371 Reads 31 Votes
HerNameIsHayley By HayleyMonroe Updated 3 years ago
Ayren Foy died. at least that was what she thought! little did she know that she would be stuck as one of the chosen people for Halfway Heaven and not just that she has to overcome the reventons. if she passes them she'll be granted a chance to go back to life but if she doesn't she'll have to stay in Halfway Heaven. weird right? i know! and she knows that too! ;) (i'll edit more later)
@HayleyMonroe You don't need to if you don't want to, but I like editing books. If you want, I'll edit it for you. I'm not the best author in the world, but I can fix the common mistakes and add a bit more detail and stuff. :)
                                    If not, I understand.
                                    -Cade x3
I just think you shouldn't use so many questions marks/exclamation points/etc. I feel a bit rushed into this, but overall it's a nice plot. I like it. :)
                                    -Cade x3
O__O okay...so she died? ahaha, that was funny actually, off to reading the other chappies!
Even as a prologue i've been entertained and find some kind of humour what Liam in the end xD its simple, basic and interesting
You kind of made this in a "Diary" format, tho, it's very entertaining:) And yeah, is that Christina Perri in your Book cover? haha, I kind of agree with @sweetlittlepianist , you should put some more innocent looking girl :) BTW, I'll just put this in my list I have to go now :)
@HayleyMonroe ...description....you put that to help readers to have a clearer vision on the place or a scene on your story....
                                    did I help or just make things harder?...