How Could He?

How Could He?

10.5K Reads 136 Votes 27 Part Story
Allison By allisonclairee Completed

Eli and Liz are sisters and try to hide from their father who beats them. But when Jered the boy that knocked up Eli comes back into her life, things are horribly wrong. He kidnaps her famil including her and trys to win her back. <-Part One
In Part Two, Eli meets a boy Henry who is feeding news to Jered(who is in jail) about Eli and when he escapes, Eli and her new and improved family(father doesnt beat them anymore) have to move and let ERic and the Cop deal with everything, but can she let them do that for her?

juanis590 juanis590 Feb 28
In my opinion. I think that you are very good at creating an image with your words. Even though this book should be off putting because of the  abuse, I was still intrigued to read further. Keep up the good work! :D
realityxfantasy realityxfantasy Aug 19, 2011
An interesting, dramatic, and creative story :) It was nicely written, and you have very few grammatical errors. Great job! :) Keep on writing :D
hiboo45 hiboo45 May 22, 2011
I really like the story! Just maybe if you could go back and fix some spelling. ~Voted
Sinfael Sinfael Apr 10, 2011
Wow. You did a good job of capturing the intensity of the scene. Voted!
allisonclairee allisonclairee Feb 26, 2011
@sandralovesjuan I didn't haha. I just was thinking of what the setting is gonna be :))
sandralovesjuan sandralovesjuan Feb 24, 2011
@turtlelover Okay, I wasn't trying to be rude though, if that's how you took it. :)