Second Impressions

Second Impressions

1.1K Reads 31 Votes 5 Part Story
Jessica By WalkInTheSun613x Updated Feb 23, 2011

All her life, Avery Fitzgerald has been taunted and teased by a boy named Murray Judd.  She tried to be strong and ignore him, but one day, her seventh birthday to be exact, the teasing became too much.  The only thing that Avery could think to do was run away, and when she did, it changed her.  When high school begins, Avery arrives only wanting to make a fresh start, but will her past come back to haunt her?

GreekStarGazer GreekStarGazer Feb 23, 2011
Running away in a Cinderella bathing suit... Not my choice of attire... Lol. 
                              Getting a bad vibe from the mom-- I don't like her.
                              Anyway, keep writing! 
GreekStarGazer GreekStarGazer Feb 23, 2011
Cinderella, eh? ;D 
                              Totally grabbed my attention. The part about grasping harder concepts... I don't know. Those sentences just *spoke* to me I suppose. Onto chapter 1!!!
                              P.S. *vote*!
MoniqueTheRippah MoniqueTheRippah Feb 22, 2011
That was soo good! 
                              You held my attention, which is a hard thing to do!
                              I really saw how angry Avery got and how much a jerk Murray was to her :)
                              *Voted* 
MoniqueTheRippah MoniqueTheRippah Feb 22, 2011
Really good start!
                              I like how you explained that a seven year old doesn't concider some things that are important :D
                              I agree with trishthewriter! The last sentance definately intrigued me :)
                              You got my vote!
                              Off to the next part!
trishthewriter trishthewriter Feb 22, 2011
Off to a good start. Not too much has been given away, just enough to make us want to keep reading. I'm voting and moving on the the next chapter. 
WalkInTheSun613x WalkInTheSun613x Feb 22, 2011
@yules930 i would have uploaded another part but it's really late where I live, so I couldn't. but I will be uploading tomorrow (today for me since it's 3 am here). stick around, its going to get good :)