Promise Me

Promise Me

1K Reads 18 Votes 6 Part Story
CountryStrong By CountryStrong Updated Mar 01, 2011

Bruce King stumbles across information regarding a secret government project that was terminated almost ten years ago, however the information suggests that a child escaped from the project and has never been found. Bruce not knowing who else has gained this information knows he must find the girl who got away before anyone else finds her and puts her abilities to mis-use. He sends his most trusted agent Jack Sawyer, to find the girl and bring her in safely.

Star_catcher37 Star_catcher37 Mar 07, 2011
Saaaaaaaad... Love your writing style, but please put less spaces.
trishthewriter trishthewriter Mar 01, 2011
I like your premise. This isn't your every day teen chick lit or vampire werewolf novel. Those are fine, but it's nice to see some break up in that. There were some great lines here too. The tear rolling down his cheek shattering her resolve was a really good one. Voted. 
xBeautifulMonsterx xBeautifulMonsterx Feb 27, 2011
You have great and vivid descriptions and details. But you might want to narrow down the paragraphs. I got a bit bored in the middle of them. Otherwise, this is a great start. Keep up the good work!
suGar_Twinkles95 suGar_Twinkles95 Feb 26, 2011
The story is good, leave some spaces on the large paragraph in the beginning of the story. 
Jean15 Jean15 Feb 24, 2011
it's good but one suggestion space it out a little better because it's a little difficult to read (:
CarinaBachmann CarinaBachmann Feb 23, 2011
it's an intersting prologue. it has a bit action and a lot of feelings in it. but you may describe them a bit more, try to get the readers into some bann so they wont stop reading.
                              i like it, how you don't say any names nor where they are.