Emo Heart

Emo Heart

1.6K Reads 38 Votes 5 Part Story
Jett By PaperScissorsROCK Updated Mar 03, 2011

Hearbroken and in pain at the loss of his sister Jett just wants to die. But can a new transfer student Kyle from Trinidad change it all? Dedicated overall to my boyfriend Kyle who i love! Kyle ur my everything baby <3

funlove111298 funlove111298 May 26, 2014
Oh poor kid to watch you lil sibling die that has to be horrible.
PaperScissorsROCK PaperScissorsROCK Feb 23, 2011
@queenkay thanks :) i didnt make Kellar's death to dramatic because i wanted it to feel more realistic and also cos it made be nearly cry just with the car crash :P
queenkay queenkay Feb 23, 2011
I like how we can feel the character's pain. i really like your descriptions you paint a picture in th my mind. and thats really good but I think the  way the girldied could be more dramatic. But all in all I really like your writing style so I voted :)
PaperScissorsROCK PaperScissorsROCK Feb 21, 2011
@bwriter thanks for the read, the vote and the advice :)
                              @trishthewriter thanks for read vote and advice :)
Bwriter Bwriter Feb 21, 2011
It feels just a little rushed, like everything is happening fast. Slow it down and describe to the reader how Jett feels about his sister, mother, or how his mother feels about him. Voted.