Beckoning Shadows

Beckoning Shadows

939 Reads 140 Votes 26 Part Story
Alizeh By KatsandAngel Updated Nov 21

Adrian is content with his quiet life, uneventful as it may be, until unfortunate circumstances and a  surprise ambush pull him into a secret society of angels. At first, Adrian hopes he can return home to his normal life, but the angels deny his request. For years, they have been  terrorized by a killer seeking to murder their entire race, and they suspect that the killer has gained a sizable following, all seeking to topple the angels' society.
The angels want one thing of Adrian: for him to infiltrate the enemy cult and help them end the threat to their kingdom once and for all.

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Cover made by @AverySummers

  • action
  • adventure
  • angel
  • backstabbing
  • battle
  • cult
  • elemental
  • friendship
  • infiltration
  • magic
  • revenge
  • secretsociety
  • spy
  • undercover
 #Rebelbc
                              He must've been badly hurt; but that still doesn't justify his actions.
 #rebelbc agreed with queen! morphed has been used twice now. repetition isn't very welcome in prose
ndcampbell ndcampbell Nov 24
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                              Okay...now HE is the villain! :D 
                              
                              I don't think you need "on" in "splattered on."
                              
                              The third sentence may flow better if you change "not been marring her face" to "not marred her face," that way you can avoid a passive verb.
 #Rebelbc
                              How could he be so heartless?!!
                              Though I don't know his motive yet, I can't imagine a reason that could make this justifiable.
ndcampbell ndcampbell Nov 24
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                              I really like this sentence--it is consistent with your poetic style of writing and almost harkens to a Victorian style of writing.
ndcampbell ndcampbell Nov 25
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                              I like how you open up the scream to further description, almost as if you're unfurling it, but maybe in the second one you could mix it up by writing, "a blood-curdling wail" instead of using "scream" three times.