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Ashley By StayingMe Completed

"Climax: Make It or Break It" features a dysfunctional relationship between a sweet, strong-headed woman and a former playboy but current military officer. Will they survive through their marriage or be forced to break it?
Find out in Climax.
*Inspired by Usher's song, "Climax".

HeartsAndArrows HeartsAndArrows Jul 26, 2013
This is a really great start!  It caught my attention and it's really catchy!  I love the characters and your descriptions!  I especially love the flashback and your writing style!
nobodyshero_x nobodyshero_x Jul 24, 2013
One thing I noticed about the synopsis was that in multiple sentences you offered two scenarios of what could happen, and then started talking about the one scenario, proving that that was the one that would occur in the story. It felt spoonfed a bit. Maybe change up the synopsis?
NDMahshid NDMahshid Aug 26, 2012
Wow, very good start. The beginning, the flashback, everything in its place, and so catching. Well done. Your characters are so real, the dilemma Suze has is so touchable. Good job, really, and voted!
chosen_one chosen_one Aug 09, 2012
This is fantastic so far! I love the beginning. It got my attention and the whole chapter kept it. I haven't read a story like this before. I'm interested to see where you take it and how it goes!
StayingMe StayingMe Jun 27, 2012
@KatherineEleanor coming from older people like me(I don't really mean old old, I'm 13,), that means alot to me and I'm saying tat to the others also. Thank you, and I will keep it up!
KatherineEleanor KatherineEleanor Jun 27, 2012
I have never read a story like this before. It seems to be coming along very nicely. I especially liked the emotion you were able to capture while writing. It was very strong and believable. Keep up the great writing!