I fight to relieve the guilt until he came along....

I fight to relieve the guilt until he came along....

37.8K Reads 418 Votes 21 Part Story
:PPPPPPPP By just1grrl Completed

Once there was a tradegy for Evelynn Stoner. She felt guilty for doing it so she makes up for it by underground fighting.
Jacob Moore was a normal boy who has no parents and takes care his little sister, Sarah. He underground fights so that he can pay for Sarah's school tutition. 

So what happens when he meets Evelynn? Will they fall in love?What happens if he doesn't help relieve the guilt?

SavyJParker SavyJParker Mar 23, 2011
Pretty good so far. Especailly for a first story. Nice work.
Shade36t Shade36t Jun 27, 2010
Wow, good prologue... can't wait to read more (literally i'm off to read the next part now) 
                              
                              Shade xxxx
novel_girl novel_girl Jun 26, 2010
this is an awesome way to start the story! it really lets you get to know the characters, im definitely gonna keep reading! you got my vote!
nlassam nlassam Jun 24, 2010
I love this line: "the underground fighter who has a messed up past and this is my story". Amazing start and really makes me want to keep reading!
wolf-spine wolf-spine Jun 24, 2010
i think I've heard this plot somewhere before...
                              
                              its a good story but it also seems like the ideas are a little bit jumbled and confused.
                              
                              I'm sure you will get better as you go on
isabella19 isabella19 Jun 23, 2010
i really wish you didnt describe them in the beginning like that but more of finding out who they were in the story. but besides that i think its really good. going to read #2 now. :)