It started with a wolf.

7 Part Story 948 Reads 35 Votes
Sydney Roseanne Curtis By FlickAndSwish Updated 3 years ago
A story I started writing for school, which I am now continuing for my own personal use.
    
    Please comment any thoughts you have. I want to know how to make my story the best it can be. c':
Hey:) -Okay, it's very descriptive and written well, although remember people can get bored easily if you start to make it sound like an English essay. Also, you need to vary your sentence types; I know short sentences create tension etc. But sometimes longer ones are good:) Also, go in depth more into what she's thinking and all that. -You're very good at creating an image in the readers mind however.
                                    There are quite a few wolf novels on the market at the moment, so make sure the story's original and doesn't become cliche. 
                                    Also, there are some spelling typos so you may want to edit before you write loads and you can't be bothered to do the whole thing, if you know what I mean:)
                                    You definitely have a lot of talent for writing, but these were just a few pointers and opinions. Well done!
Hey:) -Okay, it's very descriptive and written well, although remember people can get bored easily if you start to make it sound like an English essay. Also, you need to vary your sentence types; I know short sentences create tension etc. But sometimes longer ones are good:) Also, go in depth more into what she's thinking and all that. -You're very good at creating an image in the readers mind however.
                                    There are quite a few wolf novels on the market at the moment, so make sure the story's original and doesn't become cliche. 
                                    Also, there are some spelling typos so you may want to edit before you write loads and you can't be bothered to do the whole thing, if you know what I mean:)
                                    You definitely have a lot of talent for writing, but these were just a few pointers and opinions. Well done!
Hey:) -Okay, it's very descriptive and written well, although remember people can get bored easily if you start to make it sound like an English essay. Also, you need to vary your sentence types; I know short sentences create tension etc. But sometimes longer ones are good:) Also, go in depth more into what she's thinking and all that. -You're very good at creating an image in the readers mind however.
                                    There are quite a few wolf novels on the market at the moment, so make sure the story's original and doesn't become cliche. 
                                    Also, there are some spelling typos so you may want to edit before you write loads and you can't be bothered to do the whole thing, if you know what I mean:)
                                    You definitely have a lot of talent for writing, but these were just a few pointers and opinions. Well done!
Hey:) -Okay, it's very descriptive and written well, although remember people can get bored easily if you start to make it sound like an English essay. Also, you need to vary your sentence types; I know short sentences create tension etc. But sometimes longer ones are good:) Also, go in depth more into what she's thinking and all that. -You're very good at creating an image in the readers mind however.
                                    There are quite a few wolf novels on the market at the moment, so make sure the story's original and doesn't become cliche. 
                                    Also, there are some spelling typos so you may want to edit before you write loads and you can't be bothered to do the whole thing, if you know what I mean:)
                                    You definitely have a lot of talent for writing, but these were just a few pointers and opinions. Well done!
Hey:) -Okay, it's very descriptive and written well, although remember people can get bored easily if you start to make it sound like an English essay. Also, you need to vary your sentence types; I know short sentences create tension etc. But sometimes longer ones are good:) Also, go in depth more into what she's thinking and all that. -You're very good at creating an image in the readers mind however.
                                    There are quite a few wolf novels on the market at the moment, so make sure the story's original and doesn't become cliche. 
                                    Also, there are some spelling typos so you may want to edit before you write loads and you can't be bothered to do the whole thing, if you know what I mean:)
                                    You definitely have a lot of talent for writing, but these were just a few pointers and opinions. Well done!
Hey:) -Okay, it's very descriptive and written well, although remember people can get bored easily if you start to make it sound like an English essay. Also, you need to vary your sentence types; I know short sentences create tension etc. But sometimes longer ones are good:) Also, go in depth more into what she's thinking and all that. -You're very good at creating an image in the readers mind however.
                                    There are quite a few wolf novels on the market at the moment, so make sure the story's original and doesn't become cliche. 
                                    Also, there are some spelling typos so you may want to edit before you write loads and you can't be bothered to do the whole thing, if you know what I mean:)
                                    You definitely have a lot of talent for writing, but these were just a few pointers and opinions. Well done!