Bully+Mate=Rejected With A Baby

Bully+Mate=Rejected With A Baby

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WinnieThePooh_12 By WinnieThePooh_12 Updated Jul 17, 2014

Mary is bullied by her pack and her twin brother. She only has one friend, Jenny.  Her parents died from a rouge attack. 
 Austin is a player, Mary's bully and the-soon-to-be-alpha. when he turned 18 he found out that Mary was his mate he rejected her after sleeping with her.When Austin rejected Mary she couldn't hold it any longer with her pack so she ran away. But the thing she didn't know when she was running away was that she was carrying Austin's baby.

addykate addykate Jun 04
It's not really necessary  to tell us everything in parenthesis. Like (school) or (sarcasm) some of it is implied and we will pick up on that. And I only comment because i am a  fellow writer and I want to give constructive criticism! Love the book though!
Lol every time I see the name Jenny I think of Forest Gump and how he says.jenny
And he's pul out game is weak😹😹😹😹😹😹😹😹😹😹😹😹😹
safstar01 safstar01 Sep 26
jenny isnt really a good friend then if she doesnt have lunch with you because of what others think
_BookFreak65_ _BookFreak65_ Aug 15, 2015
gurl you is a hoe!!! thats dirty man
                              doing it in school of all places
BeastXxXGirl BeastXxXGirl Nov 26, 2014
Your story goes too fast. In the first paragraph, the M/C wakes for school. In the second, though, she's at school. You come on as desperate to get to the good parts and that's what drives away your readers. You should really get someone to help you with this, to re-write some things.