Tempest

Tempest

5.6K Reads 108 Votes 19 Part Story
anon23 By anon23 Updated Jul 14, 2012

It started with a dream. A dream Grace found all too familiar. Soon she gets strange flashes where she sees people and places she has never seen before. And there's one face she keeps seeing again and again. A young man that seems to be smitten with Grace and yet angered by her. Soon she finds herself in a web full of cunning Gods and ancient curses and what happens when she finally comes face to face to with that young man that haunts her?
Ultimately she must decide: Grace and Julian? or Grace and Will?
NO LONGER BEING CONTINUED.

(I do not own the cover image, it's from Google.)

anon23 anon23 Sep 16, 2011
@asheartseattle Thanks for the comment and the useful feedback! I really appreciate it :) X
Danaeble Danaeble Sep 02, 2011
Hah, the only thing I found 'wrong' was that you said he was a young boy at the age of 18. other than that I didn't find anything, but I like the story so far!
blakkRose blakkRose Sep 02, 2011
first off i like your cover. its cool
                              your writing style is good, your work flows well. you should use more detail, though, to help develop the setting and charactors
anon23 anon23 Sep 02, 2011
@walkingsunshine @AphroditeKid Thank you so much both your suggestions have been helpful and I've added the commas as you said :) and you're right commas do make all the difference! I'm glad both of you find the opening and the summary interesting! The opening is always the hardest! xx
anon23 anon23 Aug 06, 2011
@MeganNicole15 Thank you :)it took me ages to choose a title!
MeganNicole15 MeganNicole15 Aug 06, 2011
Your descriptions are great and it’s very interesting :) 
                              The summary of this story was also intriguing and the title was great, so overall amazing first chapter ;’)