The Dreary Thoughts

The Dreary Thoughts

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Ryptyq Ikarus AccuviZion By RyptyqIkarusAccuviZ Updated May 14, 2012

I thought I'd experiment and try telling a story through a poem. Please comment and tell me what you thing. Any suggestions will be helpful! :)

AnimeFreak26 AnimeFreak26 Sep 17, 2012
really nice flow, but its sad... but that doesnt bother me much :| i thikn its good to have different poems for different emotions, and you did really well... voted!
RyptyqIkarusAccuviZ RyptyqIkarusAccuviZ May 23, 2012
@AnaghaS Sure, I'm writing one now, I'll probably get it up by tomorrow. :)
RyptyqIkarusAccuviZ RyptyqIkarusAccuviZ May 23, 2012
@AnaghaS Yeah, I was in a particularly sad mood when I wrote this one. Usually I write happy poems, this was actually my first sad poem. :(
theordinaryoddity theordinaryoddity May 17, 2012
@RyptyqIkarusAccuviZ 
                              No problem! You did well, and that's nice your friends helped you. Hope to read more poems from you. =)
RyptyqIkarusAccuviZ RyptyqIkarusAccuviZ May 17, 2012
@mythinkingbox 
                              Thank you! I really wasn't expecting much when I started writing this one, I just wanted to convey a story through a poem so, I did. Well, I had a little help with the rhyming. I used a Thesaurus and some of my friends helped, too. :) Really, Thank you. It means a lot! :D
theordinaryoddity theordinaryoddity May 15, 2012
@RyptyqIkarusAccuviZ 
                              This is a really good poem. You expressed the emotions very well. Especially when he wished for death and wondered how life would be without him. Your rhyming is great and flowed nicely, and it's hard to rhyme.