Lost In The Proverbial Silence

Lost In The Proverbial Silence

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Coral Rayne By Breathing_Goodbye Completed

*I don't mean to offend anyone, just to understand. Sorry if I do.

If I handed you a bottle and a gun, which would you choose?

I already know this answer; I know which your hand would seize. 

The bottle is your weapon of choice.

I didn't mean to be seen.

I'm sorry to be heard.

I wasn't trying to be mean.

But the whole of the world knows what you've done. 

Now let me ask you this: if there was a gun to your head, another to your bottle, which would you save?

I already know this answer; I know which your survival would choose.

The bottle was your medicine of choice; it gave you reason again. 

You will consume it to the brink of death and just when the lights dim, you'll stop and overdose on bitter life, and it will revive you .

Will you hear my pleas?

I never meant to say a word.

I see your whiskey seas.

Drowning in a pool of tears, now, look at what I've done.

Sorry from the darker side of the sun. 

I know I've yet to win.

I was there once, lost in the proverbial silen...

HalfAwake HalfAwake Nov 18, 2012
This is beautiful. My favorites lines were "Sorry to be seen...to be mean" Just lovely.
Rinneko Rinneko Aug 27, 2012
@Breathing_Goodbye Tactful placement of irony is always effective :) Great expression of emotions that I envy always. I hope that you can vault over whatever troubles you encounter in life without falling too deep.
queerkids queerkids Aug 23, 2012
I LOVED this, the last line is amazing! very emotional and very well written :) over all perfection!
Rinneko Rinneko Aug 07, 2012
Great poem! It reminded me of all the addictions and regretted choices in my life. It's as if I'm the one with the bottle in my hands (which I am, in a different way). There was a sense of irony and a feeling of having given up (was it?) to me. Awesome :)
Rinen2 Rinen2 Jul 25, 2012
Can I refuse your choices..?
                              Is there a way for me to refuse them?
ClessaWinters ClessaWinters Jul 08, 2012
Oh wow. This IS amazing. Just wow. Is your best friend alright now?