Swords and Stone

Swords and Stone

180 Reads 19 Votes 5 Part Story
Syden By syden_01 Updated Mar 13, 2018

Svana Alderstein is on the run. 

From her country, her friends, her family, anyone who wants her dead: basically everyone. 

In their eyes, she is a threat. 

Facing danger from left and right, it will not be long before she gets caught - with only the sword on her back, which is the cause to all her problems in the first place.


Cover by @Illumos

  • action
  • adventure
  • artifacts
  • fantasy
  • fight
  • heroine
  • mana
  • runaway
  • stone
  • svana
  • swords
  • war
  • wielders
Cross-Warrior Cross-Warrior Feb 25, 2018
 #MarshmallowBC
                              
                              Since he's carrying on from what the other said, the "A" should be lower cased here :)
Cross-Warrior Cross-Warrior Feb 25, 2018
 #MarshmallowBC
                              
                              Well, they did keep you free for a year.  There's that 😂
AERETHCSWINDEN AERETHCSWINDEN Feb 25, 2018
 #marshmallowbc
                              Perhaps you might want to say "the moonlight *cast faint shadows"
Cross-Warrior Cross-Warrior Feb 25, 2018
 #MarshmallowBC
                              
                              Whenever you have a dialogue tag (something following dialogue that directly explains who said what how) that would be followed by a period normally, you use a comma, so this should be:
                              
                              "Cuff here," their squad leader ordered.
Cross-Warrior Cross-Warrior Feb 25, 2018
 #MarshmallowBC
                              
                              I think you need to get rid of the comma and add either "and" or "to be" in its place :)
Cross-Warrior Cross-Warrior Feb 25, 2018
I think you meant *scraped, and I think you meant *hard dirt road, not "dirt hard road." 
                              
                              This is all very exciting, by the way. Jumping right into a chase scene. I can see it as the start of a movie.