Allie Brooks has just found her mother dead but she knows that there is something seriously wrong with how she died, Her brother is keeping secrets and her fathers got a new lover. Anwsers won't come fast enough
@vicky_nfs i agree with u it is a great start :) xxx Add more detail xxx
@Just-Nikki i agree with you it does need to be a bit more interesting to make me read on more :) xxx
I agree with @Vibrant LOL, really random combing her hair.
The main character is cool but like I would totally go nuts if my mother died, almost in a state of depression, but maybe that's just me.
I think you need a bit more descriptions to make me feel the full tone of shock but other than that, I'm liking this. I'm going to read more. :)
You have my vote.
hey....with her mom dead why would she go brushing her hair....you know what i mean?
its an hour back almost that her mom died...try fixing that....:)