Zaldizko

Zaldizko

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Veronica Purcell By VeronicaPurcell3 Completed

"I'll find a way to save my brother. Do whatever the hell you want. I'm stealing your guns."

Famine is a man determined to save his three brothers after they were tragically separated when a magical fire destroyed their monastery home.  He finds himself in a foreign city called Apocalypse. There he falls in with the Evadale Knight Order security group, which guards the Hell's Labyrinth prison facility. The prison's system goes haywire upon his arrival.

Amongst prison chaos, Famine learns that his missing brothers are somewhere within the area. He'd do anything to save and reunite his family, even if it meant fighting malignant redback spiders and a mind-sucking demon. The fights he faces may be more than he can handle. 

This is volume one of the Seriphyn Knight Chronicles. 

It begins.

[AN:  Featured on  ☆YA's Stardust reading list☆.  Feeling sort of special right now from YA community love ミ☆ ☺️]

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Thank you! Kind of speechless at the moment. Not used to seeing comments. I'll fix this.
Great first chapter! Very intriguing and made me want to read more. I like what you did with the dialogue and it wasn’t boring in the slightest. Very good start! Xx
Nice job! It definitely is intriguing and makes me wonder what is happening! Great prologue.
I feel like you should adjust "all his sacred words were spent so his voice was mute" as it just doesn't read right in the middle of this sentence. Read the sentence aloud to help you see how we would hear it as a reader!
Here, instead of saying "his last flame of faith and hope" I would say "his last flicker of faith" to continue on from the above paragraph where you said the "light of his faith had dwindled to a mere flicker". Continuity for the win!
Countenance is not really the right word choice here.
                              
                              it's like saying: snuffing out the warmth of his facial expression. It's just not quite right for what you are saying