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Devil in the Details

Devil in the Details

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tttaylor By tttaylor Updated Sep 25, 2016

"Evil?" she asked, her lips testing the word.  She suppressed a giggle that surfaced at her mouth.  "There's no way you're evil."  
  His dark eyes softened at the sound of the humor in her voice.  He ran his fingers through his hair, pushed a few strands away from his face and let his eyes fall on her lips.  She was biting the corner of her lip, a habit that he was finding completely irresistible.
  "I assure you, Miss Cora, I am as evil as they come," he hummed seductively, snapping his eyes up to meet hers.
   "Nope," she quipped.  "You won't hurt me."  
  "Yes, Cora" he said, his eyes suddenly sad. "I promise you, I will."

rivverdale rivverdale Jun 07, 2012
Nicely described :) Love the tone and mood of the scene, good job :)
tttaylor tttaylor Jun 07, 2012
@Lost_In_A_Dream Thank you for this comment!  I really do appreciate it.  I agree that sometimes I fall into that rhythm.  The worst part is that I didn't even realize I was doing it!  Yay! Thanks for your suggestion and I WILL fix that in the future!  :]
andyelludura123 andyelludura123 Jun 07, 2012
Awesome, what a very sexy prologue, lol, ahahah! I'm off to reading more, I guess. :D
charcoalveins charcoalveins Jun 06, 2012
This seemed pretty good so far, but you kind of started too many sentences with he or she, which messes up the flow, but other than that it seems like an intriging start.
Fade_Away Fade_Away Jun 06, 2012
Wow. Amazing start.  Your descrptions are very well writen. It makes you wonder too, what the guy is. This is one of the stories that keeps you reading, eager for more. I will be reading rest later. Great job so far.
DivulsiveFlame DivulsiveFlame Jun 06, 2012
This was so good! It was short and simple. It was so mysteriouse, it made the reader want to read on :) I had a feeling that it was some warewolf story, but it says maybe a ghost? O>o