Book 1: Destruction

Book 1: Destruction

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Hamza  Khan By Hrstar Updated Jan 17, 2015

It is the Age of Aquarius, 2150 AD; it has been 150 years since the war, 150 years since they arrived. They arrived out of nowhere on 2019 AD and struck by surprise, our defence systems were no match for them. They started killing humans. My name is Jack Adams. I'm 19 years old. My mother lost my father 19 years ago. My settlement is located at these coordinates ‘61.1822° N, 148.5569° W’. I am one of the few many survivors that are living on and the only thing that keeps me going is the desire to be free.

NickNotSoBoss NickNotSoBoss Jun 11, 2014
If there's one thing in the world I can't stand it's when people don't make a new paragraph when a different character is speaking. It would be great but fix that. Please.
ZafArielZul ZafArielZul Mar 18, 2013
Small tip: your first paragraph is too long. Break it up into a couple paragraph and you're good. I'm intrigued about the Zeconian dudes now, how ruthless they seem to be - enough to drive the surviving human population to take such extreme precautions against them.