Captive

Captive

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Haha! yeah I'm gonna' tell you that! By XxsuperchikfreakxX Updated Jun 02, 2014

When you're a slave, you don't think about normal things: you think about food and beating, work and surviving, you and them. Because when you're a slave the Nobles will own you... or you will die.

She thinks she was taken from her family when she was twelve. She thinks she was beaten before she came here. She thinks her name is Emara. But she can't be sure. Emara has spent all of her life she can remember clearly in the worlds most notoriously cruel servants academy, where they take the child  of any parent that has violated the Servanthood Act  and had more than one child. She has worked all her life to protect herself and her best friend, Jayden. But on the day she is sold to a Nobels everything goes wrong.

Separated from the only person she'd found love in, Emara has to face her new master alone. But when the man and his family extend her kindness should she trust them or shut herself off?  Her world is turned upside down as she encounters new friends and new revelations. But the true test will come with each twist and turn through the new world she's discovering each day.

  • future
  • slavery
Cfunk3 Cfunk3 Aug 18, 2014
Her mother's change of mood seemed quite drastic. After not seeing her daughter for five years, what kind of woman would turn like this?
Cfunk3 Cfunk3 Aug 18, 2014
Don't forget your tenses. You're in past tense but this is present.
Cfunk3 Cfunk3 Aug 18, 2014
I love when a book throws you straight into the action and you're not disappointing. You've already laid out the stakes and they're pretty high!
Cfunk3 Cfunk3 Aug 18, 2014
Beautifully worded opening. I've already got confidence in your abilities!
Cfunk3 Cfunk3 Aug 18, 2014
Thanks so much for entering the competition. I'm going to leave a few notes for you in the next chapter as part of my review but please don't forget to check out my profile on September 1st where the winners will be announced
XxsuperchikfreakxX XxsuperchikfreakxX Feb 18, 2014
Sorry that it's just the prolougue right now. My internet being kind of retared. So until i is fixed (completely) I ca't update.
                              :'(
                              I'll try and get this fixed as soon as possible.