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Hearts of Steel

Hearts of Steel

536 Reads 19 Votes 8 Part Story
Cam and Tess By StarryRhythm Updated Feb 06, 2012

Seventeen year old Carter Collins is in, well, for lack of words, a crapload of trouble. She must carry the burden  of her father's death alone, take care of two sisters, deal with her irresponsible, desserting mother, and, worst of all, pass calculus. Having no experience in the ways of running a household, Carter has to teach herself on the fly. Her little system of working, going to school, and working seems to be running just fine until her insurance worker shows up at her door with an eviction notice. Stunned beyond words, Carter must find a new  way to come up with money she doesn't have. At this point, Carter is stuck between a rock and a hard place. She is reduced to taking what is not hers. Unwillingly forced to the ways of thievery, Carter finds out just how hard life, love, and the real world can really be, and she convinces herself that the only way to succeed in the world is to trust no one. After all, the world isn't fair, and nice guys finish last.

Live2Love2Laugh Live2Love2Laugh Nov 02, 2012
Nice work! I like it so far! It seems like you have good characters, you're pacing is good, and I really like it. Good work!
DanielaJamiso DanielaJamiso Nov 25, 2011
Wow. That's all I can say right now. This is brilliant. I'm not joking. It has everything: pacing, description, everything! I'm amazed. I like the "Anna, I think I just solved our problem" bit. Really good. Well done! 9 out of 10!!!!!