I like how you've started this story, it has a very nice flow to it, and your writing style is BEAUTIFUL!!!! Do keep on uploading, I'll be looking out.
This is really good, your a great writer! please continue with this story and upload soon :) :)
This is a great start. The plot is certainly interesting. I want to know more about Carter and whether he'll manage to find Izzie and how they knew each other and got to know each other. It's a great start, very original.
Wow. Intersting. That little boy (hide and seek) Seems creepy and I'm assuming he will come into play soon. Nice job!!
This story looks very promising to me.....I like the onion part! I think there are a few paragraphs which you break into two..... Other than that, really good start :D
@XtrainwreckX Thank u! Pls comment and vte if u lyk it
Upload ur stry soon too! It's great