a boy named jade finds himself in a townnamed calednia after being run out of his original home, becaue he's vampire.
You do know it makes almost absolutely no sense right? I can help! Small peice of advice- less choppy! Sorry if I'm being rude....
Holy crap! that's awesome, It left me wanting a whole bunch more. Keep writing, you're good.
okay so it's a little short, but I wanted to see how far it went