Excuse me while I kill my ex-best-friend?

Excuse me while I kill my ex-best-friend?

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fudgelicious By fudgelicious Updated Apr 07, 2011

Nikki Evans and Janine Anderson are BFF's. That kind of friends that are freakishly alike. But it all changes when Janine turns over to the dark side.
Who is Jake? And what is wrong with Nikki's twin brother Fred?

HawkeyeThor13 HawkeyeThor13 Feb 21, 2011
Harsh? Okay:
                              Your title, it's not a question so what's up with the question mark. You need to use actual written numbers when writing numbers that are less than ten. You also need to correct and better your spelling and it's just missing something. so there's my critique.
Stupid_CupiD Stupid_CupiD Feb 13, 2011
haha ! I like the beginning  and the reality behind the thoughts ,but yeah capitals can cause an issue.
                              
                              Good work : )
thelionftw thelionftw Feb 13, 2011
Aww poor Miriam! It's funny, yet sad at the same time what happened to her haha.
                              Good story either way. But lessen on the capitals.
RoXXieSiXX RoXXieSiXX Feb 10, 2011
Come on, keep writing... Now I wanna know more about that hot guy...
                              Let me guess, he'll be the reason to kill the ex-bestie, huh?
RoXXieSiXX RoXXieSiXX Feb 10, 2011
Makes me wonder what else the two girls have to hide...
                              And why is she yelling for a big sister?
                              But seems to become an interesing story... Keep on going.