Kiss, Cut, Cry

Kiss, Cut, Cry

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KCCavallo By KCCavallo Updated Feb 10, 2011

How does the life of a confident happy girl become torn apart?
Used by people she trusted, controlled into believing that she's worthless, years of abuse takes it's toll on a girl.
This is Kara's story of how her life is destroyed by events that shouldn't have happened.
This is my story, pages taken from my journals and rewritten to form the words before you, all of it true, nothing left out.

KCCavallo KCCavallo Feb 12, 2011
@trishthewriter Thanks, every constructive comment I get is greatly received x
KCCavallo KCCavallo Feb 11, 2011
@Mera2876. Thanks for the advice, I also noticed as I read it back that I'd made several mistakes, I will be looking into your guide when. Get a chance. You too! KCC x
trishthewriter trishthewriter Feb 10, 2011
It's clear this is going to be an intense story. I'd like to see you tone down the use of the adverbs. Show your readers what she's thinking, feeling, doing, etc, instead of telling them.