The Protector - a paranormal adventure

The Protector - a paranormal adventure

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Shruti Agarwal By TheMaskedSoul Updated Feb 24, 2011

"Shruti' loves her brother more than anyone in the world. But he leaves suddenly-and she ain't able to gulp in the fact. Just as she grows habitual-and more lonely- a boy arrives in her life-and she realizes that she had been waiting for him. With time-she would discover that her brother and lover are blessed with powers-and that their lives-along with the life of everyone on this earth is in real danger. Only one thing can help to prevent the misfortune-THE PROTECTOR- and she has to find out what it is-fast!...very fast!

TheMaskedSoul TheMaskedSoul Apr 04, 2011
@EzwanOthman ohkay..I get it..I wil try and edit it soo..thnks for ur cmnts..again..
TheMaskedSoul TheMaskedSoul Apr 04, 2011
@EzwanOthman oh mahn..U stopped in the Midway of the Prologue itself..well dat's a bad sign for me..It's okay..I guess I shud understand by now that I pretty much suck at this stuff...*sigh*
                              Thnks for ur tym gvn anyway
TheMaskedSoul TheMaskedSoul Mar 31, 2011
@CompulsiveWriter @GenXblogger Okay-I took ur cmnts seriously and decided that it was high time I edit my stuff up dr..did I do it well..or is there still a room for improvement?
                              thnks again for ur honest cmnts!
GenXblogger GenXblogger Mar 31, 2011
There is a lot of great descriptions in this story! Great job!
                              I would not use "..." so much in the writing though. It makes sense to use it a little in dialog but not so much in the descriptive text because it represents a pause in thought. 
                              
                              
                              
TheMaskedSoul TheMaskedSoul Mar 12, 2011
@mylifeisaverage Oh ma god..U read it..TG! U didn't die..(:P)
                              And I can't help using..hyphens..(-.-)
                              But I'm wrking on it..
                              And I will look into it..Thnks again..and it was just a prologue..so It didn't hv to explain d lead dt much..does it?
                              U'll know about her...in the chps dt follow..
TheMaskedSoul TheMaskedSoul Feb 16, 2011
@AuntyHeart go ahead..glad to hear that..:D..
                              i'll upload soon..