Fireheart

Fireheart

5 Part Story 678 Reads 22 Votes
Bree Carmen By breezyloveyou Updated Sep 19, 2012

My name is Scarlett, I have long black hair, clear blue eyes, and I have hunters searching for me. Why there are hunters after me? Well they are after my heart. Apparently, my heart is very special to them, so special that they will go through such expectations as to kill the people I love. I have to go now; I must leave because I think someone is watching me…

Megabucks Megabucks Sep 23, 2012 09:02AM
Good for your first story :)  It was a bit confusing because I thought Mr. Walsh was already deceased after being stabbed with the jagged wood, but you had some good description during the action scene.  Your main character seems strong and courageous and you have a unique storyline.  Nice start.
breezyloveyou breezyloveyou Apr 16, 2012 03:10AM
@penguinslover thank you so much for the comment. I really appreciated it. And I will continue writing it's just I've been busy. But I will add a chapter
WritingFever WritingFever Apr 13, 2012 02:20AM
@breezylovesyou I like this story so far. I've never heard anything like it, it's unique and that's perfect! ;) Can't wait for the next part.
breezyloveyou breezyloveyou Apr 12, 2012 11:59PM
@Hinged thanks for the comment i'll try to make it more clear
Hinged Hinged Apr 12, 2012 11:57PM
I'm confused. The plot is promising but needs a better set up.