Child of thorns

Child of thorns

7 Part Story 2K Reads 174 Votes
Paul By Lessthantruthful Updated Jul 24, 2012

Aegon is an ageing assassin who lives with his son Fin in a mysterious land where kings and queens rule. He is about to undertake a very dangerous assassination against the king of the rebels,. This entire empire is at stake and this is only the beginning...

KarouLethifold KarouLethifold Jul 29, 2012 11:45AM
Very interesting beginning and your descriptions are quite well written :) Lucky you, you'll find this book in my library ;)
MarineLynn MarineLynn Jul 15, 2012 10:09PM
Description was limited, but still good. I thought you could add a hint more, but this hooked me. I thought it flowed quite nicely, but in some areas it was awkward.
@bre631 Yeah I have to edit this chapter a bit haha. This is the longest chapter I have, the rest are much shorter :)
A very nice start, and interesting nonetheless
                                    His short hair short hair had become unkempt and his linens torn during training.
                                    I'm assuming the fact that his hair was short was an important fact to remember?  (。-_-。)
                                    Other than that, very interesting beginning. A good start.
Meeklover Meeklover Jun 20, 2012 11:04AM
This stuff is not usually what I go for but I really enjoyed it and this is going to get a vote and in my library :D
This is definitely a great start to a story, it's very well written and you obviously have a talent for this kind of thing! Its really pulled me in and i cant wait to read more of it!!:-D