Forever One of The Boys

Forever One of The Boys

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Nikki By queenlemon Updated Jan 03, 2013

Victoria Jensen, a 16 year old girl who is surrounded by boys 24/7. No no, not like that. Nothing romantic. She lives with her five brothers and father. Best friends with four of the most crazy guys at school, Ash, Matt, Aaron, and Haden.  During the summer, something in the wind changed. When the guys go away at a sports camp for a week, it leaves Vicky alone with her boy infested home with no other friends at all.  She meets new kids, Riley and Julie Taylor, who change her life upside down, and to be honest- Vicky sort of likes this new change.

Good book but you should really add some paragraphs. It makes it all jumbled and confusing
sweetstuff1323 sweetstuff1323 Aug 04, 2014
You really should separate paragraphs when a new person starts talking. Btw not trying to be mean.
greenyoshilover287 greenyoshilover287 Jul 07, 2014
I'm so confused with the names of her brothers. It says five brothers but when I counted, there were six...? I don't know anymore.
victorialynn121 victorialynn121 Apr 11, 2014
Holy crud finally a girl with the name victoria (my name) and with the nickname vickey(my nickname and how I spell it) not tori!!!
babyG_mac babyG_mac Dec 15, 2013
green and purple are my favorite color, my iphone is those colors haha felt the need to say that!
FryThatChicken FryThatChicken Sep 29, 2013
Your story plot seems great already, but I just hate the fact that your paragraphs are longer than anaconda and your dialogue is all smashed together. Please fix it.