Abuse and Rejected Completed

Abuse and Rejected Completed

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Kimbe By kim110176 Completed

Today is my birthday but there is none to share it with me, I threw out of my pack by my family and what I thought were my friends.  I have been out on my own for six months now I barely have anything to eat I am so skinny you can see some of my bones I’m bruised and cut up and probably near death. Right now I’m looking for a place to lay my head down my name is Crystal Blain my family is part of the Red Rock pack my life was not always like this it all started one year ago when my two best friends died they also were my older and younger sister.

I feel so bad for her I feel like crying cause no child should have to go through what she went through
Its_Jamyaa_ Its_Jamyaa_ Jul 29, 2015
She better be glad I'm not ha daughter she would've had to beat me till I died cuz I would spit in ha gave then beat ha ass and walked off like a g
Daselah_Graham Daselah_Graham Nov 25, 2012
you should read over your intro part to your story,  a few things wrong with it. if the reader reads it they will assume that rest of the book is poorly written.
cashy7183980 cashy7183980 Sep 19, 2012
Your punctuation is horrible. I can't tell who is speaking and who's point of view it's even in! Ernest Hemingway didn't tell who's saying what but at least the reader can understand who's saying what and when.
endora12 endora12 Sep 18, 2012
Please use these " " they are quotations you put them around dialogue.
amimikey amimikey Jun 21, 2012
ouch my eyes.its kinda hard to read when there's like no punctuations at all but i do like your story :)