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Porcelain White

Porcelain White

305K Reads 12.3K Votes 27 Part Story
Julie Granger By JulieGranger Completed

In 1876, mail-order brides are swept off their feet as soon as they arrive in town, but not Isabel Grant.  She is rejected by Capt. Pichon for being a skinny, school-girl and is left in town to wait three days for the next train. Sergeant John Webster delivers the news to her and feels hopelessly drawn to protect her.  Isabel discovers her independence, but she finds out she doesn't have the legal right to be independent.  Will she go back to a life of poverty?  Will she be forced to marry? Or will she be allowed to stay?  Read about Isabel in Porcelain White.

TakenByThePhysicist TakenByThePhysicist Jun 24, 2016
Obviously lying to pay lesser fare
                              My aunt's husband did that 9 years ago (I was 11) I had to say I was 9/10 while my younger brother and cousins also had to lower their ages as well 
                              There were 6 of us so yknow, every little helps
MerryFranz MerryFranz Apr 03, 2016
I like the description, although it is surprising.  Maybe in the first chapter there could be reference to how unusually pale her hair is, so "porcelain white hair" makes sense here.
RKStewarttson27 RKStewarttson27 Mar 17, 2016
I'm 25 and look forever twelve. And the discounts are a blessing especially when you have a large family to pay for.
yellowbuds yellowbuds Mar 20, 2016
"Sounds" interesting. The constant  dialogue changing from 1st person to 3rd person keeps derailing my concentration, tough. Yeah, a reader's problems haha
MerryFranz MerryFranz Apr 03, 2016
Why doesn't he explain?  If he feels bad, why aren't we told that he ached to explain the situation to his daughter, but only felt shame....?
MerryFranz MerryFranz Apr 03, 2016
The rest of your paragraph is past tense, then this sentence is present tense.  You may want to change "checks" to "checked"