They Sold Me To A Mafia Family

They Sold Me To A Mafia Family

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Alexis By Agateophobia Completed

A girl name Jade was sold by a mafia family cause of her parents in debt. To able to pay it all she has to live with that family where she cooks and sometimes cleans. She meets the maifa's son Aiden who she pretty wells get along with. Will she able to live with them or would she try to run away. Or could this be the started of someting new.

BlackDragon6144 BlackDragon6144 Nov 03, 2016
the paragraphs are really bad but still, i ,like it...
                              please edit more and change the paragraph splitting. i don't understand it much...
JS-1998 JS-1998 Nov 13, 2016
wow, that's harsh.... HOW DO YOU SELL YOUR FAMILY?!!!
                              I'D RATHER TAKE A BULLET TO MY HEAD THAN SELL MY FAMILY!!!
pena_tiffany pena_tiffany Dec 30, 2016
Hi I'm a new writer and I'll appreciate it if someone read my new book called Walking On The Wild Side it's about the 1920s mafia if you're interested please read it :)
NoHOMOsAPIEN NoHOMOsAPIEN Oct 05, 2015
This was an interesting start, just work on capitalization and maybe add a little more dialogue. Also, the paragraphing is a little difficult to read, but other then that, it's a good beginning. I look forward to reading on.
THEW0LF THEW0LF Aug 22, 2015
So much needs to be done. Until then, it's deleted. Hope you can get around to fixing it.
celestinekai celestinekai Mar 09, 2014
Pls check the grammar..  ahehe! A bit confusing..  thanks! ..but i like the story. God bless!