Blaze is now a vampire mated to a werewolf, weird isn't? well it gets more weird... so come join us on their second adventure on My Child, plus there is a big bad/good news, that will make Jacoby and Blaze's life worst.. or better?.
Dialogue needs help.
"Hey," she said. Notice the comma. Your dialogue is terribly wrong.
She sighed, turned and said, "Hey."
Just go over all of it, add the commas.
Omg it would be so cool if they were to have twins =P
Nice chapter! I liked it ^-^