Cataindar: The Discovery

Cataindar: The Discovery

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Tim Johnson By Tim Completed

#1 for a month on the Fantasy-Action Hotlist. 
Wattys2015 Winner. 

  Fourteen-year-old Luisa is focused on staying under the radar at her rough London school, relieved that the summer holidays are soon to begin.  Exploring the ruin of an abbey at night, Luisa falls into the underground land of Cataindar. The catains are a cat-like race, possessing powers and magic that most humans could only dream of.  They have been expecting her. As the catain abbot guides Luisa through their world, Luisa finds out that things in Cataindar are not quite as they seem.   Old secrets are discovered, new loyalties are forged and a dark truth puts Luisa's life in terrible danger.   Cataindar is the first in a planned series involving talking cats, giant rats, the Russian mafia and an ancient power that will change the world as we know it forever.

MaquelAJ MaquelAJ Apr 01
Hmm. Got me interested so far. If he's been there for a lifetime biding his own and no one has figured it out yet, what is his end game?
So I came because the cover is beautiful and I am staying for the beautiful writing. Great prologue!
FlyingOrca FlyingOrca Mar 24
Im really sorry but I can't help picture Tai Lung from Kung Fu Panda for the prisoner XD
RobMay RobMay Nov 21, 2015
Very good. I'm guessing the prisoner is some kind of giant cat-like  humanoid, but you  keep things serious and dangerous so I kind of accepted all this as perfectly normal ;)
Picniclunch Picniclunch Nov 01, 2015
I really like it but i think as a suggestion that you should describe the body in the corner a bit more. Like maybe say  'the bones scratched and gnawed at make the body look distorted' something like that. But otherwise great
preciouse34 preciouse34 Sep 20, 2015
late reader but i must say everything has caught my attention .so many questions have popped up in my head because patience isnt a virtue of mine