Ran Shaipur

Ran Shaipur

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Theresa Ryder By tlryder Updated 3 days ago

Ran is the 10th Warlord of Brundt, the largest territory of the former Republic of Dobruja-- a colonial planet on the outermost edge of the old Galactic Corp expansion.  A near death experience convinces him that he's been named Shaipur, mythical savior of all Dobruja, by the Ancestors themselves.  He's on a mission to rein in the other Warlords and stabilize Dobruja.  Just when he thinks he's finally got things under control, the reformed galactic government comes calling. The new General Union has its own agenda for reunification, and it's uncertain what role Dobruja and Ran are meant to play in this new galactic corp's plans.
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Meanwhile, Ran is discovering that interpreting and acting on mystical visions is much harder than he might have expected. The other Warlords have their own ideas about what the Shaipur should do. And they consider their own interests to be of paramount importance, even with a galactic-sized threat literally hanging over their heads. Ran is going to need a lot of help from his staff, his wives, and the Ancestors themselves to keep Dobruja safe from enemies foreign and domestic.

"teeth, the only clean thing left on his mud smeared face."  - This is an awesome line! Great job!
JRShepherd JRShepherd Sep 06
This is intriguing.  I like all your characters name and the surroundings good job.
This is outstanding! Great job, easy to follow dialogue, and you created a great world here.
The description here is outstanding. I love the line "Better to sweat than to be chewed raw by the insects."
"anything like accurate" I may just be reading wrong, but "like" accurate could be better described as "near accurate," "close to accurate," or if you want to be a little humorous you could say "within a grenade toss of accurate."
wyogal11 wyogal11 Jul 25
This is the second time I've read the prologue and I enjoyed it even more this time around.  I love your writing style. Very smooth!