Voiceless Bird

Voiceless Bird

2.8K Reads 464 Votes 25 Part Story
Starlight Fleur By SilverSloth Updated Oct 29

Nightingale has always been overshadowed by her 'best friend' Misty. Misty's obsessed with getting into the Academy and becoming one of the Royals, but things don't quite got to Misty's plan as Nightingale is the one who is chosen.
        
        For Nightingale, the Academy isn't such a dream that Misty's always told her it is. While it's played up to be the best life any teenager could wish for, it's hard to believe when your Academy partner hates you. 
        
        Robin, son of the Ruling Royals, seems to loathe Nightingale from the first moment he set his eyes on her and adheres to a certain hostility. But first impressions don't always tell the whole story, and Robin seems to have more on his agenda- especially concerning Nightingale's new friend, Meraella... Figuring out who to trust has never quite been this difficult. 
        
    When past meets present, a dark force threatens the peace of the Academy and Nightingale must piece together the puzzle of the Academy's history before it's too late. But when she can't even find her voice, how can she hope to save anyone?
        
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BillRuesch BillRuesch Oct 09
I am enjoying the self talk. She gets 💯 on her tests, but doesn't think well of herself at all. I'm sure this is the struggle she will rise above in the book.
@SicSemperT-Rex
                              
                              This was a good introductory chapter.  For some strange reason every time 'magic' and 'school' connect in my mind, I think of Harry Potter! I hope we delve more in the relationship between Misty and Night in the following chapters as well as more plot! Dialogs are good!
JadeXenapus JadeXenapus Nov 08
You don't need your character to justify why he has chosen the term 'stone grey eyes'.
BillRuesch BillRuesch Oct 09
You really don't need to restate that she was trying to review the test with her friend.
It was a light read, which was good for the start of the story. Nightingale seems like an interesting person although she still seems mysterious to me. I wonder why Misty acted the way she did. I'd recommend adding more description about Nightingale (physical looks etc)
 #SpectrumBookClub
                              Your introduction is  well written and you only have the necessary information and you don't go overboard with dialogue which is good. Although your information is a little slower at the end than at the start. Overall great work.