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Fallen Angel

Fallen Angel

9.9K Reads 171 Votes 25 Part Story
Sarah By musicalsweets Completed

Leira Shay is a young soldier living in a time plagued by war. Their forsaken enemies crush all hope, and destroy homes and lives. She has been majorly affected by this, losing many beloved family members and close friends. When her home is destroyed, she must leave to escape death. When a mysterious crystal is discovered, it brings trouble with it. This simple gem is the most desired object in the world, and their enemies would kill for it. It surrounds Leira in legends and unravels clues to a centuries old mystery that has long gone unsolved. Unfortunately, these legends and mysteries involve beings that aren't even human...

squirrelg squirrelg Apr 19, 2014
I don't normally like prologues, but this was really good. Hope the main story arc is just as interesting!
JoanaDimitrova JoanaDimitrova Apr 18, 2014
You just have your way with words. It's just amazing how you manage to set the mood and give the readers a clear picture of what you see. Great job. :)
musicalsweets musicalsweets Apr 09, 2012
                              Haha, so I've been told. I think it's one of my strong points. 
                              Thanks for reading and voting! Much appreciated! :)
BlxMagic BlxMagic Apr 09, 2012
Wow ... you truly are blessed with the gift of describing.
                              I Voted <3
musicalsweets musicalsweets Mar 26, 2012
@ClaudineVV @sporadic7 Thank you both so very much for reading! I really appreciate the constructive comments as well. :)
ThurstonHearts ThurstonHearts Mar 26, 2012
Very good description! This flows and is so well written! The only thing I would tell you to watch is starting sentences with "the " to much. The paragrahs were an okay length for me, because I usully write, in that manner but spacing out could be nessecary in some places. Anyway! Good job! Voted!