Noah price is a regular 15 year old kid, like you or me. Except that he lives in the year 2159, knows how to fix a space ship's navigation computer, and oh yeah, gets powers because of a military based project.
Good beginning. Could have been longer and needs a bigger punch on the cliffhanger, in my opinion. Hope the rest of it is as good as the beginning!
I just started writing a story :P i would love it if you checked it out:)
Nice opening but cou.ldhave been slightly better .love the 'felt it' rather Thant theheard it!
So... Should i read it again from the first chapter? Or is the story the same? I'm a bit confused here... Didn't start reading this version but i am a devout follower of the updates to your book xD
Vivid scenes. I'm a big fan! Full of imagination and creativity. Nice and easy reading.
I feel like this could be better written: "A familiar voice was telling her to put me under, yet I was already slipping (drifting?) away, trying to remember where it all began...