Miranda's Vacation

Miranda's Vacation

456 Reads 100 Votes 12 Part Story
Elizabeth A. Rochel By ElizabethARochel Completed

Miranda the absent-minded sleuth is taking a cruise to avoid anything related to solving mysteries, of any kind. But the forces just won't let her rest.

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KateMcGinn09 KateMcGinn09 Jul 11, 2017
You could have Miranda think something about him and his grandiose ideas
KateMcGinn09 KateMcGinn09 Jul 11, 2017
I think I would delete the 'were' in 'they headed'. It will flow better I think.
KateMcGinn09 KateMcGinn09 Jul 11, 2017
I like the chapter.  And the hook at the end implying Miranda had just stolen a trinket.
KateMcGinn09 KateMcGinn09 Jul 11, 2017
I would end this sentence at smiled.  It feels like you are changing POV
kv_wilson kv_wilson Jul 14, 2017
Some were lined up for snorkeling(,) some fishing(,) and others were...
                              I'd be lined up for snorkeling. I love watching the fishies :)
KateMcGinn09 KateMcGinn09 Jul 11, 2017
I'd remove the book right before shelf so there isnt repetitive words in same sentence.