Never Trust Strangers

Never Trust Strangers

679 Reads 10 Votes 1 Part Story
Eirinn By Ezmeralde Completed

This is another peice of original writing i did for my english coursework. It got an A*

httpdiam701 httpdiam701 Aug 07, 2012
U seem smart and I need help with something I know we don't know each other but can u kik me
                              Because I need help from a smart person
Ezmeralde Ezmeralde Mar 09, 2012
@foxifae Well it recieved an A* so I don't really care what you'd give it.
foxifae foxifae Aug 30, 2011
A nice story with very good descriptions and good grammar but your punctuation would only get a D from me. Fix this and I'm sure it'll do well. xx
katrocks247 katrocks247 Jul 09, 2011
Great descriptions! Only thing that bothered me was the dialogue should be seperated from the descriptions. The paragraphs were a bit lengthy because of that. Great start only a few grammatical errors (commas). Good luck! :)