This is another peice of original writing i did for my english coursework. It got an A*
U seem smart and I need help with something I know we don't know each other but can u kik me
Because I need help from a smart person
@foxifae Well it recieved an A* so I don't really care what you'd give it.
A nice story with very good descriptions and good grammar but your punctuation would only get a D from me. Fix this and I'm sure it'll do well. xx
Great descriptions! Only thing that bothered me was the dialogue should be seperated from the descriptions. The paragraphs were a bit lengthy because of that. Great start only a few grammatical errors (commas). Good luck! :)