A story about a girl sold in to the sex trade with a troubling past.
-EDIT; most chapters have had small changes, the largest one is in the last one, i hoped you guys liked reading this as it is now complete-
Short and abrasive text patterns set a cold and 'almost dead' reality mood, I feel the way you've written it paces through each emotion two quickly, some part this is used to your and vantage of the telling of the story other part need to be fleshed out more. All in all really good.
very abrupt if thats the word.story feels alittle rushed. but the fact that the main character is so broken is a pulling factor....she doesnt want to escape....she wants to die. but will she? thats why im reading this now :P
Thank you so much, I actually have already written more on this story, think I'll post it tomorrow if I have time to proof read everything
This is really Interesting. I love ow there's no dialouge, just this hazy flashback sort of thing. And the end of the chapter was good as well. There was a typo though, taking about her mother's death, 'water' is spelled wrong.