My dad sold me to be a vampires slave

My dad sold me to be a vampires slave

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LoraliMacyD By LoraliMacyD Updated Sep 05, 2011

I walked down staris because I heard sobbing. " what's going on?" I asked " chessnee dear your father is gone to the market to sell you to a vampire to be their slave." I stood there in shock and ran up to my room noticing my brother Cole was behind me. He pulled me into his lap and let me cry for what felt like hours. 

"chessnee, you will probably be gone by tomorow so let's have a little fun tonight. Let's invite my friends over." 

" how is that fun for me?" I snapped

" you should hear my friends talk about you they think your some goddesse or something."

" sure you can invite them over they will never see me again."

Right as the doorbell rang my dads car pulled into the garage he swung the door open and yelled " great news we are rich I sold you to the vampire king and he payed me extra for bringing you by soon." but the door was open and all the guys heard it. I ran up to my room knowing everbody was following me. I fell onto the bed and Blake the guy who got in my room first ...

Try putting more detail and emotion into it. Don't rush it. Its to fast buildup the plot.
GamingYing GamingYing Mar 14
This story moves too fast and the grammar needs to be worked on....
uhhhh....ummmm not being a hater or a story pooper but seriously this is emotionless and is moving at the speed of light
Mo_Linguish Mo_Linguish Mar 17, 2015
Her dad is such a jerk. When all her friend at the party threw him down, why didn't she try to make an escape? She's upset about being sold but just allows it to happen. :l