A Deadly First Love

A Deadly First Love

46.1K Reads 392 Votes 38 Part Story
Annie R. By AnnieR Completed

Adrian is dying from something the doctors have no cure for. The only people who can help her are her ex-boyfriend, Jonathan, and his cousin, Ricardo. But to every solution there are a couple problems. 1] Werewolves; 2] Jonathan's memory loss; and 3] An attempted murder. When Alpha's and their mates are involved lies and chaos are sure to follow. Adrian has no choice but to piece everything out and save them. Who she can trust and who is a traitor?

snuggle_puggles_rule snuggle_puggles_rule May 28, 2012
OMG!!! love the story so far! i now have it on my read later list since i don't really like to read and write things at the same time, but when i am done with my book, i'll definitely start reading this and i'll be sure to comment, fan, and vote!
AnnieR AnnieR Oct 05, 2011
@daydreamer1977 I like harsh comments because like you said it only improves my writing. When i was writing this i didn't really think about people not agreeing with the age this happened but it sort of had to happen for something to happen later. But thank you for pointing all of this out.
AnnieR AnnieR Oct 04, 2011
@tinakilgore Yeah i now but I'm honestly too lazy to go back and reread and fix... But later the mistakes are less. thanks.
ZeffaRose ZeffaRose Oct 04, 2011
Wow. I love the whole idea of Love at first sight. They always capture my attention. I think it is so sweet! I love how you showed us this stuff, like the past then tells you bout what happened right before going to chapter 2? I thought it was Fantabulous!
rkhosp rkhosp Oct 04, 2011
I really like how you laid this out. I like the fact that you asked questions through out it, because it really makes you think! :) This is a good first chapter, and it makes you want to read more. Your grammar isn't horrible, but you do have some mistakes! Nice job. :)
tinakilgore tinakilgore Oct 04, 2011
really good though there were some mistakes but other than that it was really good!