Transcendence

4 Part Story 144 Reads 11 Votes
MarcelineQuantum By MarcelineQuantum Updated 3 years ago
Fantasia is a world full of wonder and magic. It's people are of all races except for human. Some are gifted with the ability of Imaginatinon. Imagintion allows them to use a whole knew sense to creat things out of thin air. The person with the most powerful Imagination is their princess Stirling who has just turned eight. Her birthday falls on the festival of Inventioned which lasts a week. But on the first day and her birthday her queendom Kristal is under attack. Feeling through the Refelctors Stirling finds herself in a new world where everything she knew no longer exists. Will Stirling be able to keep her memories long enough to get home? Or will she run out of time and lose everyone she loves.
You still had some spelling mistakes, like 'tank' instead of 'thank'. You might want ot fix those too. And the punctuation errors are still there. But I like the fact that the animals can talk! :) Also, some of your paragraphs are too long. Some wattpaddians are chased away by the long paragraphs. It's just a suggestion. I don't mean to make you loose confidence but I just thought you should know all the mistakes. :) Please don't hate me! :)
You still had some spelling mistakes, like 'tank' instead of 'thank'. You might want ot fix those too. And the punctuation errors are still there. But I like the fact that the animals can talk! :) Also, some of your paragraphs are too long. Some wattpaddians are chased away by the long paragraphs. It's just a suggestion. I don't mean to make you loose confidence but I just thought you should know all the mistakes. :) Please don't hate me! :)
You still had some spelling mistakes, like 'tank' instead of 'thank'. You might want ot fix those too. And the punctuation errors are still there. But I like the fact that the animals can talk! :) Also, some of your paragraphs are too long. Some wattpaddians are chased away by the long paragraphs. It's just a suggestion. I don't mean to make you loose confidence but I just thought you should know all the mistakes. :) Please don't hate me! :)
You still had some spelling mistakes, like 'tank' instead of 'thank'. You might want ot fix those too. And the punctuation errors are still there. But I like the fact that the animals can talk! :) Also, some of your paragraphs are too long. Some wattpaddians are chased away by the long paragraphs. It's just a suggestion. I don't mean to make you loose confidence but I just thought you should know all the mistakes. :) Please don't hate me! :)
You still had some spelling mistakes, like 'tank' instead of 'thank'. You might want ot fix those too. And the punctuation errors are still there. But I like the fact that the animals can talk! :) Also, some of your paragraphs are too long. Some wattpaddians are chased away by the long paragraphs. It's just a suggestion. I don't mean to make you loose confidence but I just thought you should know all the mistakes. :) Please don't hate me! :)