abandoned for life?

abandoned for life?

527 Reads 10 Votes 4 Part Story
Amy By Verabradleyrocks Completed

Sophie Lee is 16 years and is living in an orphanage with her 9 year old sister, tessalie. sophie already thinks her life is bad enough. but she soon finds out her boyfriend and sister are at a risk of death. to top that her best friend ditchs her and her orphanage is burned. Sophie finds herself living in a foster home owned by woman who doesnt care about nor feeds but 2 times a day. she thinks her is at its worse but she discovers her live is going to get worse. can sophie handle all of this or will she become homeless and die?

markschmoyer markschmoyer Apr 19, 2011
@Verabradleyrocks probably just better flow with your writing, so jerky...if that makes sense ;)
Verabradleyrocks Verabradleyrocks Apr 19, 2011
@Jimgon21 thank u! However yours is better! Yes i know, im not the best at grammar... Is there anything u think i need to work on?
markschmoyer markschmoyer Apr 19, 2011
Good start! The first paragraph is a little awkward, but I like it! A few minor punctuation details, but everyone has them. :) good job!
Verabradleyrocks Verabradleyrocks Feb 10, 2011
@LeeksAreUniquee  of course i will read ur storys! thank u for voting! thank u for reading it to! 
                              
                                                                                         
LeeksAreUniquee LeeksAreUniquee Feb 10, 2011
I voted! I like it, its good so far! (:
                              Will you read my storyy? I'd really appreciate it! x3